Rough Cut - After Correction

 

Rough Cut - After Correction

Steve Roberts, our tutor, suggested I change a few things:

- When the character comes out with small smile, cut in to his face to show small smile, cut back out to show can splash.

- Make hand look as if it goes into purse and comes out.

- Bit of anticipation up before he falls into hole then make fall slightly faster.

- When skipping, he needs to go out of shot before cut to ice cream licking.

- The girls point of view shot of the ice cream on her dress is confusing.

- Make the girl look more angry in the long shot as man backs away.

Here is the animatic after incorporating some of Steve's and Matt's suggestions:

Some parts of the animation turned out decent like when he spots her and when he steps back from the car.